The Ranger of Chaos-Harbinger of Doom Ch7. END OF PART ONE

[synn90210]

I know what you're all thinking. Dad? What the heck? You heard him right. Dad.

"Wait dad? You killed my dad. This isn't happening." Both Drake and I were in total shock. Nothing like this had ever happened before.

"You got it right my boy. Im your old man."

"But I'm nothing like you! You're a sadistic freaking lunatic! You can't be my dad!" Drake wasn't taking the news well. Did you pick up on the part where he called us 'boys'? Yeah I just realized that.

"Drake I think he means we're his kids." Drake looked at me and realized that I was right. We totally overlooked all of this from the start.

"Well I don't care. Dad or not he's going to die. I don't care if he's my dad he destroyed my village and killed all of my friends." Drake drew both of his swords and got into a battle stance. I drew my bow and stood there for a moment wondering if I would ever see any of my friends again. I figured now it was all or nothing This was it whether I lived or died. Drake charged for him swords flying. They clashed weapons as I fired volley after volley of arrows. The arrows didn't really seem to be having much of an affect on him. He slammed Drake into a wall and charged for me. I threw down my bow and raised my fists. He threw aside his sword as I threw my bow. At least he seemed to have some sense of a fair fight. He had a flair of insanity in his eyes. He feinted towards my face but landed a hard punch to my stomach. Drake ran up behind him and kicked him hard in the back of the head. As I was stunned he turned and punched Drake away. I got up and aimed a few kicks at his face but to no avail. He grabbed my leg and threw me into the wall. Drake and I got back up and came at him at the same time. We figured he couldn't block us both at the same time. He deflected our blows and blew us both back.

"Come on boys. Didn't I teach you better?" The tone in his voice was almost......happy. It seemed like he wanted us to kill him.

"I'm going to kill you!" I was in a rage. I felt my dark power flowing through me again. I transformed and saw that Drake had also transformed. We came at him again but it seemed as though he had powered up too. Drake spawned swords of light and slashed for Fangblade. He had tears in his eyes as if he was going to regret this. Fangblade grabbed his sword and sliced for Drake's chest. There was a deep cut as blood sprayed everywhere. He fell to the ground almost dead. He started healing automatically but it would still take a while. It was now one on one with me and Fangblade as the contenders. I looked at the energy covering my hand and wished I had a sword. Instantly the energy took the form of a sword in my hand. I got up and started slicing Fangblade's arms. It hardly worked. I heard the roar of a dragon and I was blown back against the wall. Fangblade walked over without saying anything amd lifted his broadsword. It came crashing towards my head. I thought "no it can't end like this" And now we're back to where we started for those of you paying attention. Now my life was flashing before my eyes. I saw my childhood. I saw all of my friends and family. I saw the terrible event and I thought of something. I couldn't die. I hadn't got my revenge. Just before the sword connected with my head I grabbed the blade and shattered it. Drake seemed to have healed too. I had a brilliant idea.

"Drake come here!" I jumped away from Fangblade and relayed my plan to Drake. He agreed whole heartedly. We stood up and he grabbed my arm. He started to pull me into his body. There was a flash of light and a large explosion of energy. A solitary figure stood alone in the light. He was neither I nor Drake. Fangblade stood in awe at the presence of this figure.

"Wh-who are you?" Fangblade could hardly speak as the figure's presence was so legendary.

"I am neither the bringer of light or the harbinger of doom. I am that which is in between. I am neither good nor evil. All I know is that you must end....father." We charged for Fangblade and tackled him hard. We spread our wings and flew like a flash of light. We flew until we took him into space. We turned and faced the earth. There was a sonic wave as we took off for the ground. There was a deafening explosion as we hit the ground with Fangblade in tow. The force of the impact was so great it separated Drake and I. Fangblade was still alive in the crater but just barely. I jumped into the crater and raised my hands at him. They started to glow with dark power.

"Goodbye.....father"

The End.......of Part One

[futurestart]

this is reallly epic. Very common idea. You know like bad guy destroy villiage
ends up to be father
and stuff yea very common. not very surprised.
and please, Dont make your self "Too cool"
Its getting annoying. but cool story.
well written

[synn90210]

yeah i really shouldve thought of a better premise but part 2 will be better

[futurestart]

Great! at part 2 please try something new. Dont use such a commen idea and stuff. cause i can easly predict what will happen next. and thats not really fun.

[synn90210]

yeah i already have part two in mind but im tired of writing for tonight so i'll start another time

[jonlin]

daddy? seriously, daddy? lol, ok I don't think a legendary being that had the power of two brains working behind it would use the word daddy.

other than that and the cliche storyline, very good!

[synn90210]

yeah i just went and edited it so now its better

[jonlin]

"Goodbye.....daddy"

[zenopop]

interesting but not best work

[synn90210]

"Goodbye.....daddy"

i wanna ask if u read the part where i said that the impact separated us?

[jonlin]

yes I read that, but still, wouldn't he be sophisticated enough to say like father especially when he isn't familiar with him at what, 20?

[poke1024]

overall it is very good, but some things are a little cliche

[poke1024]

overall it is very good, but some things are a little cliche
try a new approach to it in part 2

[synn90210]

-cough- edit -cough- ok i get it its freakin cliche i only had to hear it once.

[poke1024]

sorry, my comp glitched and the response didnt show up, so i did it again

[synn90210]

is okays. i have part 2 already done in my head its just a matter of time until i write it

[poke1024]

cool, i cant wait

[jonlin]

Lol thats like most of my A noob's Life chapters

[synn90210]

lol thats how you've inspired me

[jonlin]

I figure out what roughly will happen then I refine it as I write