Soldiers prologue

[futurestart]

Nara gripped his Dagger tightly as he waited for the signal.
a pinch of sweat dripped down upon his cheek. He had been
waiting in the sun for such a long time that his brownish black hair had
almost became completely wet. Blood shots covered his green
eyes and his skin was very tanned.
Nara's Muscles tensed as soon as he heard the sound of running
footsteps. Bash! Haven kick open the door as he ran out of the
trade shop.

"Zeno take care of the rest!" he shouted, then gesterd us to run.

Nara, Hexon and Hevan Started to run.
Nara took a glimpse back as Zeno Swiped out his
Golden crossbow and slipped in a bomb arrow. The deafening
sound of the bomb arrow filled the air, smoke came from all directions.
The shock wave Managed to torn down the Wrecked shop and the Land scape
beside it turned into ashes. Zeno started running after the second after shock
to make sure everyone was dead.

"What did you get?"Hexon asked
"not much, They barely had anything good." Haven said then brought out a
little bag that was tied tightly and stained badly with blood.

He opened it,
The gold and silver coins shined brightly across the valley upon
the bring hot sun.
"I believe its just enough for some food for all of us."

Everyone nodded and stopped running waiting for Zeno to catch up.

The bumpy road was covered with rocks and dirt, trees and grass covered beside
the road but most had dried out.
Haven had natural redish hair and pale white skin that matched
his light blue hair.

Just then, BOOOOM!

A loud explosion came from the direction of Henesys.

"What the heck?" Haven said.

then at a slip second Zeno swiped out his golden cross bow and and
brought it upon his face. 3 bullets bounced off the bow.
Everyone became alert. 3 Gunslingers came into sight and held
Their Guns up pointing at the band. Then a Another
Pirate came out. Havens Eyes widened.

"W-wwhat, I though you were dead" haven mumbled

The pirate smiled.

"Take them into custody."

The 10 more pirates appeared and blunted them in the head.

Everything went black


To be continued


Sorry i know its really boring, Thats because its just starting.
It will become WAY WAY better when the good parts come in
just give me your honest answers please.

Thanks!
Hope you enjoy the series

[jonlin]

just two syllables.

SpellCheck

[futurestart]

just two syllables.

SpellCheck

wtf? i have spelling mistakes? Are you shure? 0.0

[jonlin]

compeletly

Blood shots coverd his green eyes
should be
His green eyes were bloodshot
plus you spelt covered wrong

Haven kick open the door
should be
Have kicked the door open

gesterd

Hevan I think should be haven, no?

glimps

deafning

derections

The shock wave Managed to torn down the Wrecked shop
should be
The shock wave tore down the wrecked shop

Just to note a few

[zenopop]

besides the minor errors its good

[LeoWu]

Wow Jolin, Haven is a name its not Have...
OTher than that its Really good,
AND MAPLESTORY IM BACK WHOO HOO!

[jonlin]

lol I made a spelling error while pointing out spelling errors

[LeoWu]

Lol Jolin no offence but i found it kinda funny.
When you were commenting on Naras Mistakes most of your words that
you spelled out of Wrong.
LOL

XD

By the way its suppose to be bloodshots covered his green eyes i think... O_O
Cause bloodshots is like a thing so.... Cause like you wouldn't put
"His green eyes were dust"
you would say that if it was dust so yea.. Blood shots are the same.
I think 0.0

[jonlin]

is english your first language? in the dust case you would put ' his green eyes were dusty' it's a matter of tense and bloodshot doesn't fit into the tense he used it in. also, i was pointing stuff out if it was a spelling error, not correcting. =/

[LeoWu]

Yes reread it You were correcting, That is if you dont know what correcting means.
Yes Its my 3rd language
:)

[jonlin]

I was showing spelling errors and correcting grammar. I know what correcting means -.-

[LeoWu]

I was showing spelling errors and correcting grammar. I know what correcting means -.-

Yes you were correcting. ^^^^^^^^^^